my comic :)

[seeker11]

page one of my graphic novel "rivalry"..typo error kagad finishing it up while watching miami vs spurs game 7 kasi e..distarcted hehehe..hope to finish 10 pages of this soon...

[Ozymandias]

Improve mo pa yung anatomy and gesture drawing skills mo para mas okay. :-) and yung sa first panel, Inedit mo ang isang photo dun tapos ginawa mong cartoonish effect or a filter. Long way to go para mapaganda mo ito but you'll get there. Update mo tong thread mo para malaman natin progress ng comics mo 

[sugunoy]

nice one good sir.. keep up the good work.

[crashtest]

Great work. up for this.
Thanks you for sharing!


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[seeker11]

sorry mga chiefs! but decided to put the "rivalry" story on hold for now..instead im doing this piece for now, already finished doing 3 pages of these doing other pages as we speak..hope to here some feedback from you guys and oh, some "karma" would be great too..

[IORI™]

Bilib ako sa inyo sir! Nice share, be proud! ..

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[EreimondB]

More! More! more! Aabangan ko ito sir JohnLemon24. Thanks for sharing.

 

[gainax_jin]

nice one sir.. ipag patuloy mop lang.. aabanagn ko ung mga updates mo

[jamesbond]

ok ito... Abang mode din ako...


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[Ozymandias]

Since you want a feedback here I go.


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Staging : Way off yung staging at yung background is crying out for an improvement. Wala kang vanishing point at walang perspective. Simply flat.


Character design : Needs a lot of improvement talaga, out of proportion yung body. If you want a close-up shot dapat maganda yung proportion ng mukha.


Lighting and Shading : confusing kung saan yung light source mo. Your cross hatchings needs more improvement. 


Panel Layout : Madaming resources on how to draw comics and how to properly layout your sketch per panel. May isang panel ka na edge to edge yung characters, that's a no-no for a comics.


What you did : Scanned your inked (looks like a ball pen ink) drawings then edited it using photoshop, used the normal brushes, patong lang ng ilang digital brush ink sa drawings mo.


Overall : If you're serious on your comics, as I was serious in giving you feedback then you need to improve your drawing skill badly.

Additional : di ko gets yung art style mo. Haha is it anime-ish or western style?